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Started by skuLLy, Jun 05, 2009, 08:35:40 PM

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Ratchetcomand

Ratchetcomand

#15
Quote from: Pvt. Hicks on Jun 06, 2009, 12:06:59 AM
Never understood these threads. Who cares what our story is, because in the end, their story is the one that's going to be on the big screen.

So? People have the rights to make their own ideas for fun and their is nothing wrong with that.

predatorfandrc90

predatorfandrc90

#16
My point of view for the storie's is set in the time period after alien Resurrection.Human's have attacked a predator diplomatic ship in the middle of a peace treaty with a clan they have been waring with for some time.The predators out raged unite and attack earth,they cripple earth's military fleet and begin landing their ship's killing worthy prey and capturing the others.Then the story goe's to Andy a lone colonial marine who's squad has been killed who is now on a suicide mission to newyork to use an experimental weapon which he fire's  downing the predator vessel's giving the remaing humans time to escape to a to the far reach's of the galaxy.

Yautja117

Yautja117

#17
This is how I see it: It's 2453 and humans have been Terra-forming planets for about a hundred years or so. A new planet has been selected and the process begins. The planet is a hot, steamy jungle world, with many forms of native life. Little do the human colonists know, but a pack of novice warriors, is hunting nearby. The pack leader, a veteran of many hunts, spots the marines on patrol and the Predators begin a new hunt.

predator24

predator24

#18
 ;D fricken predators land in iraq and start pwning everybody and some iraqien yells motherf**king ultimate rambo f**k then gets owned in the face then owns harry potter in the butt then goes to new york and owns micheal jackson fans then owns batman aka batfag then preds have arguement and one kills the other and they start killing eachother the they go to afghanistan and play afganhistan idol and starts singing sweet home alabama and goes all the way and winn milliones and kills bill gates and takes his money and becomes rich then loses all of his money because he got some many pot deals that the russian mob came and toke his money then he got arrested then the other pred goes in and says you had it all pred then you lost it what happened then he says he needs to back home to pred world then starts owning anybody in sight and plays a game called grand theft predator then gets owned by a shotgun and goes to heaven and then a gay angels at the gates and says your going to hell and he is like serious and he is like yes bitch muahahahahhahaha shittttt then is satans sex slave for twenty years then god gives him a chance to come back to earth what he has to do is kill supermen and then owns him with the disk right in the head then god sends him back and owns some more then he gets a girlfriend called stewie the cheeky bastard and then he shoots him in the head and runs back to pred world the end yeah or is it then pred starts woning little fat midgets then kills the elder and turns predworld to earth 2 ruled by a dynasty of crime and they star pooping and a guy named karter the clown man starts dhooting baby preds then stars pwning then micheal jackson rapes karter and karter peas himself and stars owning micheal jackson with his pea and dies of aids then stars coming bcak to life and dancing over the death of himself and goes on a killing rampage in heaven and starts owning then god owns him and fricken goes to purgatory and floats forever the end bitch yeah

Neverfate

Neverfate

#19
Quote from: predator24 on Jul 10, 2009, 08:42:10 AM
;D fricken predators land in iraq and start pwning everybody and some iraqien yells motherf**king ultimate rambo f**k then gets owned in the face then owns harry potter in the butt then goes to new york and owns micheal jackson fans then owns batman aka batfag then preds have arguement and one kills the other and they start killing eachother the they go to afghanistan and play afganhistan idol and starts singing sweet home alabama and goes all the way and winn milliones and kills bill gates and takes his money and becomes rich then loses all of his money because he got some many pot deals that the russian mob came and toke his money then he got arrested then the other pred goes in and says you had it all pred then you lost it what happened then he says he needs to back home to pred world then starts owning anybody in sight and plays a game called grand theft predator then gets owned by a shotgun and goes to heaven and then a gay angels at the gates and says your going to hell and he is like serious and he is like yes bitch muahahahahhahaha shittttt then is satans sex slave for twenty years then god gives him a chance to come back to earth what he has to do is kill supermen and then owns him with the disk right in the head then god sends him back and owns some more then he gets a girlfriend called stewie the cheeky bastard and then he shoots him in the head and runs back to pred world the end yeah or is it then pred starts woning little fat midgets then kills the elder and turns predworld to earth 2 ruled by a dynasty of crime and they star pooping and a guy named karter the clown man starts dhooting baby preds then stars pwning then micheal jackson rapes karter and karter peas himself and stars owning micheal jackson with his pea and dies of aids then stars coming bcak to life and dancing over the death of himself and goes on a killing rampage in heaven and starts owning then god owns him and fricken goes to purgatory and floats forever the end bitch yeah


Vulhala

Vulhala

#20
Quote from: predator24 on Jul 10, 2009, 08:42:10 AM
;D fricken predators land in iraq and start pwning everybody and some iraqien yells motherf**king ultimate rambo f**k then gets owned in the face then owns harry potter in the butt then goes to new york and owns micheal jackson fans then owns batman aka batfag then preds have arguement and one kills the other and they start killing eachother the they go to afghanistan and play afganhistan idol and starts singing sweet home alabama and goes all the way and winn milliones and kills bill gates and takes his money and becomes rich then loses all of his money because he got some many pot deals that the russian mob came and toke his money then he got arrested then the other pred goes in and says you had it all pred then you lost it what happened then he says he needs to back home to pred world then starts owning anybody in sight and plays a game called grand theft predator then gets owned by a shotgun and goes to heaven and then a gay angels at the gates and says your going to hell and he is like serious and he is like yes bitch muahahahahhahaha shittttt then is satans sex slave for twenty years then god gives him a chance to come back to earth what he has to do is kill supermen and then owns him with the disk right in the head then god sends him back and owns some more then he gets a girlfriend called stewie the cheeky bastard and then he shoots him in the head and runs back to pred world the end yeah or is it then pred starts woning little fat midgets then kills the elder and turns predworld to earth 2 ruled by a dynasty of crime and they star pooping and a guy named karter the clown man starts dhooting baby preds then stars pwning then micheal jackson rapes karter and karter peas himself and stars owning micheal jackson with his pea and dies of aids then stars coming bcak to life and dancing over the death of himself and goes on a killing rampage in heaven and starts owning then god owns him and fricken goes to purgatory and floats forever the end bitch yeah

Words can't describe. This is almost as funny as B-RadG's story. Almost.

Pvt. Hicks

Pvt. Hicks

#21
Quote from: predator24 on Jul 10, 2009, 08:42:10 AM
;D fricken predators land in iraq and start pwning everybody and some iraqien yells motherf**king ultimate rambo f**k then gets owned in the face then owns harry potter in the butt then goes to new york and owns micheal jackson fans then owns batman aka batfag then preds have arguement and one kills the other and they start killing eachother the they go to afghanistan and play afganhistan idol and starts singing sweet home alabama and goes all the way and winn milliones and kills bill gates and takes his money and becomes rich then loses all of his money because he got some many pot deals that the russian mob came and toke his money then he got arrested then the other pred goes in and says you had it all pred then you lost it what happened then he says he needs to back home to pred world then starts owning anybody in sight and plays a game called grand theft predator then gets owned by a shotgun and goes to heaven and then a gay angels at the gates and says your going to hell and he is like serious and he is like yes bitch muahahahahhahaha shittttt then is satans sex slave for twenty years then god gives him a chance to come back to earth what he has to do is kill supermen and then owns him with the disk right in the head then god sends him back and owns some more then he gets a girlfriend called stewie the cheeky bastard and then he shoots him in the head and runs back to pred world the end yeah or is it then pred starts woning little fat midgets then kills the elder and turns predworld to earth 2 ruled by a dynasty of crime and they star pooping and a guy named karter the clown man starts dhooting baby preds then stars pwning then micheal jackson rapes karter and karter peas himself and stars owning micheal jackson with his pea and dies of aids then stars coming bcak to life and dancing over the death of himself and goes on a killing rampage in heaven and starts owning then god owns him and fricken goes to purgatory and floats forever the end bitch yeah

Good God...that was the ultimate "Do not type like this" post. How do you have the ability to type on a computer, but not realize that nobody is going to read that thing?

XenoVC

XenoVC

#22
Paragraphs much?

RakaiThwei

RakaiThwei

#23
I could think up of a story.

Open to a scene of Fuedal Japan, where there is a village being burned down by some unseen invisible force. Villagers are running for their lives, samurai are trying their best to deal with those who need help and trying to fight this invisible assailant. We see alot of samurai being killed, all but one Samurai of course who manages to get a lucky strike on the assailant and reveales it to be a Predator Hunter. The Hunter draws out his wristblades and engages the samurai in a bloody battle, and in the end, the samurai kills the Predator and calls him an "Oni", believing the Predator to be one. The samurai turns and walks away, bloody, beaten and almost killed but lives on to fight another day.

We see another invisible Predator step into view and through his POV, we watch him stare as the samurai walks away.

Cut to modern day Japan, Tokyo.

The Yakuza are running rampant, smuggling drugs, extortion, prostitution. The Japanese police are once again trying to regain control of the streets of Tokyo and are doing a failing job of it. Businesses are in debted to the Yakuza clans and establishing dominance in the underground world. Enter Boss Takahashi, established dominant leader of the Yakuza clans, and the descendent of a samurai bloodline.

Thing suddenly go wrong when the killings begin when several Yakuza members are killed in an attempt to take their protection money from a small family business. Boss Takashi is the only survivor, baring witness to the deaths of his comrades by an invisible killer. Takahashi begins to lose his established dominance in the Yakuza underworld because of his fears and rumors that it was he who had killed his comrades.

Police are also investigating the killings, trying their best to discover who is killing Yakuza leaders and gang members. Reports of the events in Los Angels circa 1997 are brought up and police believe it to be a copy cat killer. We are introduced to Detective Keiko Nirasawa, widower and single parent who lost her husband to Boss Takahashi in a crossfire shootout ten years ago. Upon learning that the killer has spared her husband's killer, she decides to investigate-- with ulterior motives tempting her to get some form retribution for her husband's death at Takahashi's hands.

Cut to Takashi's home. We see him sitting in the middle of his Ancestor's shrine, trying to find answers as to what to do and how to cope with what he has seen. We then transition to where Takashi was but a boy and his father, who was also head of the Yakuza at the time, tells him the story of the creature who plundered a village and many, many samurai and how it was his ancestor who killed the beast with a family heirloom-- the very katana which was used to kill the Predator who plundered the village back in Fuedal era. Transition to present day once more and we see Boss Takahashi's little girl, Kimiko, walking in and talking to her father, instilling a sense of courage in him. Realizing that he maybe next to die, and coming to accept that, Takahashi takes the katana from the display case and walks out.

Cut to the streets of Tokyo, a club scene where Yakuza bosses, exlcuding Takahashi are sharing a drink and discussing who is behind the killings. And to ensure that no one tries to kill them, there are tons of body guards packing intense heat. This is just bait for the Predator to take, and we get shoot out happening. The bosses are killed, the guards are killed-- heads and weapons are taken as trophies by the Predator. At the last minute, both Takahashi and Nirasawa both catch sight of the Predator and try to kill it, but fail in doing so, and the Predator escapes. However, Takahashi and Nirasawa exchange a dialogue and realize that they need to work together in taking down this extraterrestrial killer.

.....Thats the basic gist of my idea. I'd cast Meisa Kuroki as Nirasawa and Ken Watanabe as Boss Takahashi.

-Rakai'Thwei


skull-splitter

skull-splitter

#24
keywords for a successful Predator flick:
-badasses
-contemporary setting
-exotic land
-believable plot
-suspense rather than in your face action

Personally I'd set it in fictional Africa, with grasslands, desert and jungle settings as backdrops. I'd have several predators, but focus on one only. I'd have illegal big-game hunters that seem to have influence on local authorities, and a hero that is a kind of mercenary that serves both local civilians and local authorities, but is protecting wildlife too. He knows at least one of the hunters, and starts tracking him down. Only to discover that the hunters are being hunted themselves.

RakaiThwei

RakaiThwei

#25
Quote from: skull-splitter on Jul 12, 2009, 07:01:12 PM
Personally I'd set it in fictional Africa, with grasslands, desert and jungle settings as backdrops. I'd have several predators, but focus on one only. I'd have illegal big-game hunters that seem to have influence on local authorities, and a hero that is a kind of mercenary that serves both local civilians and local authorities, but is protecting wildlife too. He knows at least one of the hunters, and starts tracking him down. Only to discover that the hunters are being hunted themselves.

I like your idea. Sounds better than Rodriguez's vision if you ask me.

-Rakai'Thwei

skull-splitter

skull-splitter

#26
It'd be more grounded than P2 and the AvP flicks at least, but I'm still working out balancing between all the factions... Can't have too much politics in it too, since it is primarily an action sci-fi flick.

RakaiThwei

RakaiThwei

#27
Quote from: skull-splitter on Jul 12, 2009, 10:15:28 PM
It'd be more grounded than P2 and the AvP flicks at least, but I'm still working out balancing between all the factions... Can't have too much politics in it too, since it is primarily an action sci-fi flick.

Personally, my idea would've been more character driven and still have actions scenes in it.

-Rakai'Thwei

skull-splitter

skull-splitter

#28
True that, but you'll still need about three or so key action scenes.

I really want the viewer to have the feel of hunting and being hunted while tracking down the big game hunter and end up on the Predators game trail.

predatorfandrc90

predatorfandrc90

#29
Quote from: predator24 on Jul 10, 2009, 08:42:10 AM
;D fricken predators land in iraq and start pwning everybody and some iraqien yells motherf**king ultimate rambo f**k then gets owned in the face then owns harry potter in the butt then goes to new york and owns micheal jackson fans then owns batman aka batfag then preds have arguement and one kills the other and they start killing eachother the they go to afghanistan and play afganhistan idol and starts singing sweet home alabama and goes all the way and winn milliones and kills bill gates and takes his money and becomes rich then loses all of his money because he got some many pot deals that the russian mob came and toke his money then he got arrested then the other pred goes in and says you had it all pred then you lost it what happened then he says he needs to back home to pred world then starts owning anybody in sight and plays a game called grand theft predator then gets owned by a shotgun and goes to heaven and then a gay angels at the gates and says your going to hell and he is like serious and he is like yes bitch muahahahahhahaha shittttt then is satans sex slave for twenty years then god gives him a chance to come back to earth what he has to do is kill supermen and then owns him with the disk right in the head then god sends him back and owns some more then he gets a girlfriend called stewie the cheeky bastard and then he shoots him in the head and runs back to pred world the end yeah or is it then pred starts woning little fat midgets then kills the elder and turns predworld to earth 2 ruled by a dynasty of crime and they star pooping and a guy named karter the clown man starts dhooting baby preds then stars pwning then micheal jackson rapes karter and karter peas himself and stars owning micheal jackson with his pea and dies of aids then stars coming bcak to life and dancing over the death of himself and goes on a killing rampage in heaven and starts owning then god owns him and fricken goes to purgatory and floats forever the end bitch yeah
Wow very ah religious.

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