A battle scene from my script #2

Started by Prime113, Oct 26, 2010, 08:05:36 AM

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A battle scene from my script #2 (Read 3,143 times)

Prime113

Prime113

OK, this is a fight between Khan, an Elder BSP and an Alien(Not Xenomorph) Death squad Member.  The alien is like a big, brute reptile.

EDIT: Describing what the Aliens use and look like-      We see Three seven foot reptilian death squad members walking through the jungle.
Hellish looking masks cover there face. Heavy Jet-Black armor. Bronzesword-esque plasma swords in there hands. These guys are definitely the worst of the worst from where ever they came from.


EXT. JUNGLE. DAY
The last Alien death squad member runs through the Jungle.
Then he stops. Sensing something behind him.
KHAN de cloaks. Wrist blade extended. Takes off his Plasmacaster and sets it on the ground.
The Alien ignites his Plasma sword. Charges.
Blades clang furiously.
Khan gets in close, grabs the Alien, a massive head butt sends the Alien back.
The Alien quickly takes out a plasma knife, hurls it at Khan. Sticks in his chest. Armor around it melted.
Khan takes the knife out and throws it to the ground. ROARS then charges the Alien.
Brute vs Brute. Not smart on the Aliens part.
Khan picks him up and throws him through a tree. The Alien bangs against another tree. He falls to the ground.
Black bloods flows from his mouth. He pushes himself back up.
Khan stands confident.
Again the alien charges. This time ducks under Khan's attacks and slices him across his side.
That just pissed Khan off.
The Alien attacks. In one smooth motion Khan cuts it's blade arm off, slices him on the side then stabs him through the back.
Khan lifts him off the ground with his blade then pushes him off.
Trophy time.


What do you guys think? Again, just lookin for any opinions out there.

FUZION PREDATOR

WOW f*cking awesome. The Predator is completly badass!!!!!
Can you give a better description of the Pred opponent, like his height, weight?

And it would be cool to add some new predator toys in those battle or rare ones like the "Predator conret jungle" glaive or maul

OmegaZilla

OmegaZilla

#2
After reading the text I can't quite take off this image off my mind. :P

Prime113

Prime113

#3
Quote from: FUZION PREDATOR on Oct 27, 2010, 06:59:16 PM
WOW f*cking awesome. The Predator is completly badass!!!!!
Can you give a better description of the Pred opponent, like his height, weight?

And it would be cool to add some new predator toys in those battle or rare ones like the "Predator conret jungle" glaive or maul

I kinda pictured him as like 7 foot but completely ripped, like massive muscles. And to tell you the truth when I think about how I would like it to look I think of Piccolo from Dragon Ball Z just a little more reptilian looking.

EDIT: Also check the EDIT I made on my original post.

Quote from: OmegaZilla on Oct 27, 2010, 07:04:04 PM
After reading the text I can't quite take off this image off my mind. :P
http://i54.tinypic.com/bdnuc6.jpg

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

OmegaZilla

OmegaZilla

#4
A funny thing.
You called your Predator "Khan".
Which is a Villain from the 2nd Star Trek.
:P

Prime113

Prime113

#5
Oh, LOL, I'm not a big Star Trek guy, sorry.  I guess that's what this means: Star Trek: The wrath of KHAN, means?

And I used Khan simply because he is the leader of the new group of BSPs.

fry1236

fry1236

#6
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Prime113

Prime113

#7
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

fry1236

fry1236

#8
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:30:56 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

Well, with most "action" movies or books it's all talking at first but I've always loved movies/books that get strait to it.

Prime113

Prime113

#9
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:32:14 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:30:56 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

Well, with most "action" movies or books it's all talking at first but I've always loved movies/books that get strait to it.

Oh, I definitely get right to it. Though, this isn't the first scene in the movie. I start off whit a 4-Man Delta team in Afghanistan.

fry1236

fry1236

#10
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:34:30 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:32:14 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:30:56 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

Well, with most "action" movies or books it's all talking at first but I've always loved movies/books that get strait to it.

Oh, I definitely get right to it. Though, this isn't the first scene in the movie. I start off whit a 4-Man Delta team in Afghanistan.

Cool, some day I'm going to write my own AvP book, but with Aliens and predators ONLY, no humans to ruin it.....And predators will win  ;D

Prime113

Prime113

#11
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:36:52 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:34:30 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:32:14 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:30:56 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

Well, with most "action" movies or books it's all talking at first but I've always loved movies/books that get strait to it.

Oh, I definitely get right to it. Though, this isn't the first scene in the movie. I start off whit a 4-Man Delta team in Afghanistan.

Cool, some day I'm going to write my own AvP book, but with Aliens and predators ONLY, no humans to ruin it.....And predators will win  ;D

Awesome!  :)

fry1236

fry1236

#12
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 02:04:18 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:36:52 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:34:30 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:32:14 AM
Quote from: Prime113 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:30:56 AM
Quote from: fry1236 on Jan 05, 2012, 01:25:56 AM
Wow very action packed  ;D I like it.

Awesome! Glad to hear you liked it, fry.

Well, with most "action" movies or books it's all talking at first but I've always loved movies/books that get strait to it.

Oh, I definitely get right to it. Though, this isn't the first scene in the movie. I start off whit a 4-Man Delta team in Afghanistan.

Cool, some day I'm going to write my own AvP book, but with Aliens and predators ONLY, no humans to ruin it.....And predators will win  ;D

Awesome!  :)

Not yet  ;D But this is about yours  ;)

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