book 1 AVP OVERRUN (New Chapters as in right now!) (plz post)

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book 1 AVP OVERRUN (New Chapters as in right now!) (plz post) (Read 14,357 times)

The Ghoul

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Aliens Versus Predator
                   Overrun
                                             By
                                  Stephan Rampley










   The explosion happened sending both the Queen and William Reaver flying out of the complex and into the air. The Queen shielded him from the flames and the force of the blast as they flew. His mother screamed as the heat hit her back. No not his mother although she called him such she was nothing but a monster that helped in his creation. When they land he'll kill her; Reaver swore. As they flew into the air the monster hugged its son in blind love to protect him although it chased him through the complex and tried to kill him. Reaver saw his moment, they were now in a downward fall. He stood on the alien Queen. To him she was nothing but that now. He aimed his pulse rifle and fired a grenade in the wound in her chest. It exploded sending Reaver away from his mother; she screamed. Reaver then landed on the ground on his back the air knocked from his lungs, then a blink of darkness.

   He is a being of three aliens that should of never have been combined. The Strength of a Predator, the body of a Human, The adaptive ability of a Xenomorph. All sides competed for dominance and now he defeated the Xenomorph side. Its only a matter of time before the next side will try to conquer him. He then saw the impossible his mother roar and crawled to him dangerous and angry. My Son why have you betrayed me why? The voice sounded hurt and angry. "Mother you are a monster and evil!!!!!" Reaver smiled raised his pulse rifle and fired everything into the crawling Queen. His mother screamed in pain but she kept on crawling out of sheer hate. Reaver pumped his rifles grenade launcher and fired it into her open mouth as is screamed. It exploded sending acid flying into the air in hot gushes. You will always be my son and alien... Those were her lost thoughts before she died.

   Reaver took a heavy breath, he did defeat the aliens and the predators and his friends are safe. He became weak in the knees suddenly and crashed onto the snow. He then saw nine predators de-cloak around him in a circle. Then a big old predator stepped up to him in the snow and chuckled. Then the strangest thing happened.




its a teaser u put at the beginning of a book to get ppl to read it instead of going straight to prolouge just so you all know.


here's chapter 1 if u want to read it. if its spaming plz let me know and i'll do somthing about it.

Chapter 1
U.S.S. Pegasus
Day 1, 1100 hrs

   The entire unit stood out in the hanger bay waiting the promotion ceremony to start. Master Sergeant Brian B Jacob, a short African American mean as a pissed off cat and scowl of a bull dog. His as tough as nails and he can piss razor wire. His the shining example of a marine in the USCMC (United States Colonial Marine Corp) He was dressed in his standard uniform as were all the others. There was no need for a ceremony on ship but Brain believed it had to be done anyway these were his men a promotion is a big thing. He smiled. "Attention!" Brian shouted and everyone stood at attention. "Tonight we are here to great a new rank of one of our fellow comrades as you all know. "

   Some Marines chuckled and Brian smiled. "You can see his stripes right now and his rank is strong men and an honor. I give you Gunnery Sergeant William D Reaver! Now come and stand in front of your grizzled Master Sergeant." Brian smiled big as his best trooper walked forward.

   Reaver is the biggest Marine in the Corp, he weighs at three-hundred-fifty pounds all of it harden muscle. His hair a dirty blonde, his eyes like green emeralds, his jaw firm, and his height seven feet four inches. His shoulder were broad and firm, he is nothing but a giant among. He's not even entirely human the company grew him up in a lab and gave him to the USCMC to train and raise. His a super solder and also the best man Brian has ever known.  "You finally made it to Gunny Reaver, I'm proud of you." Trying to hold a tear behind his eye. Brian was the man chosen to train Reaver and raise him.

"Thank you sir!" The massive Reaver spoke loudly making echoes.

"You now rightfully have all the honors and responsibility's to this rank use them well." Brian had a big proud smile towards his "son"

"Now will you do the honors?"

"Attention Marines you are now dismissed!" Everyone cheered and walked up to Reaver and gave him pats on the shoulders and cheers of celebrations.

   Reaver felt happy, he was glad his promotion brought happiness to them specially ever since the last op against terrorist. They lost good men in that fight. Reaver smiled at the man who was like his father. Brian he cheered and hugged him. Now the unit had a new Gunny to watch their backs. Everyone all knew they could rely on Reaver. "Listen up all of you. We don't have to leave Gateway in another three days. So keep your communicators on if anything comes up. Now enjoy your vacation men." Brian cheered and walked about the hanger bay enjoying his Cuban cigar.

   The other smiled at Reaver and began to leave. He smiled his appreciation is over now or so he thought as he heard a girls voice call to him. He turned his back and saw a black hair woman standing looking at him. Her hair was in a bun and she had brown eyes. Her body was well built and lean. She had a busty chest and a very fine figure. She was beautiful in Reaver's eyes. She let her hair down and motioned for him to come closer. They were very good friends with benefits and many think they're going steady but they're not although they do love each other.

   Reaver walked to her slowly smiling. She was tall at least six feet for a woman but of course Reaver would still have to bend down to kiss her. He reached her and smiled and bent over and kissed her on the lips deeply. He then heard Brian chuckle. "You and Evac get a room or else I'll report ya!" Brian was joking of course.

   Reaver smiled and took Evac out of the bay. Evac is her nickname but its been a long time since Reaver knew her whole name. So everyone just calls her Evac because well she's the smart gun specialist, you call for back up and she shows up laying a wall of suppressing fire. You don't want no better covering your ass then Evac. She smiled at Reaver.  "Congratulations Reaver." She stopped them in the middle of hall and she pulled his head down and kissed him.

"Thank you Evac so where are we going?"  Reaver asked.

"Easy to bed silly. What other ways can you think of other then celebrate" She giggled.

   Reaver laughed to himself. "Why you dirty little minx." He grabbed her and she yelped.

"Careful honey we're almost to your new room. Luck you don't have to sleep with us grunts now due to chain of command." She smiled.

"Yeah but if higher ranking official shows up I get the boot." He kissed her neck remembering the chain of command top three get rooms. That are: The new Lieutenant, Brian, and Reaver.

"I don't think that will happened and I hope you know for the next three days you aren't leaving this room." She smiled and pulled him into the open door. The door shut behind them.

   The room was dark and black but still Reaver could see in the dark for his eyes were great and he could see Evac emit a glowing aura that only he can see of heat and pheromones. Her cloud would change color by her mood. She removed her top to show her bare naked breast. She then walked up to Reaver and kissed him. Deeply as she ran her smooth warm hand under his shirt to feel his toned chest. She still continued to kiss Reaver as he Kissed back and rub her left breast. She then back away and undid her pants as did Reaver, then she pulled him to the bed and laughed. "What am I going to do with my new Gunny?" She smiled.

"Anything you want." He ordered and kissed her as she spread her legs to let him in.

"I love the way you kiss me Reaver." She smiled and moaned as he entered her.

   Evac felt so alive feeling Reaver inside her she always loved him. She was just too afraid and so was he to go steady but now as they made love in this room she thinks she met the right man. She moaned again as he picked up pace. She kissed Reaver on the lips as they began to sweat from their combined heat. It made Evac all hot and she was enthralled by it. Soon she could feel the ship shaking and she saw everything as beautiful. She couldn't believe she wanted it this bad that she's orgasm so soon. She didn't mind as them both moaned and groaned came at the same time. 

   Reaver was breathing hard and then laid next to Evac. They both sucked at the air to regain there lost breath. They both felt good and satisfied. Reaver looked at the dark grey ceiling in the darkness. He's mind suddenly became filled with thought about who he was. He knew he was only a third human, the other two are dangerous aliens who has been forcibly to give there blood to him. He looked at his hands and the long black sharp nails. He could cut into wood with them. He wonder why he was such a freak. He then could feel all three sides pull at him to do different things. One want to mate again with Evac, the other wanted to paste her to a wall and the last one wanted her skull. He couldn't help but think how funny it was to be bonded with such complex life forms. He's surprised all three were compatible to make him. He smiled and looked at Evac she kissed him and he felt warm feeling bubbling up to the surface. "What's your first name Evac? I forgot." He smiled.

"Tenshia." She smiled. "But call me Evac."

"Well Evac would you like to go steady?"

"Yes." She kissed him and laid her head on his massive muscular chest.

   Evac was happy to hear him ask her to be his girlfriend, it made her feel warm. She couldn't help but wonder will they become more? She hoped they would because they knew everything about each other she couldn't help but smile. He listened to his powerful beating heart. It was like a powerful drum deeper then anything she ever heard. She loved the sound of his heart it made her sleepy and as long as she heard it she knew nothing will go wrong. She slowly drifted into darkness.


   Reaver felt tired and his mind was quiet now as had his answer from Evac. It made him feel good. He listened to her snore. He thought it was a funny sound hearing her snore it made him smile. She looked so wonderful laying her head on his chest like that. He ran has finger through her hair and felt the silky smoothness of it. He then took a deep breath exhaled and drifted off to deep dream filled sleep.   







that's all for the tasting i'll start a story thread soon just want to leave u guys with a taste of the book. thank you.

keylight-di

This beginning  looks very promising. You must necessarily continue your story. Write something more about the Reaver. Who he is and why he is what he is.Write something more about Predators.
The end seems to be very intriguing. Promissing. You provoked my curiosity. So - go on!  :)

QuoteThen the strangest thing happened.
Oh, yea.....  ;)

The Ghoul

The Ghoul

#2
Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 16, 2009, 11:52:05 AM
This beginning  looks very promising. You must necessarily continue your story. Write something more about the Reaver. Who he is and why he is what he is.Write something more about Predators.
The end seems to be very intriguing. Promissing. You provoked my curiosity. So - go on!  :)

QuoteThen the strangest thing happened.
Oh, yea.....  ;)
thankyou  ;D although the teaser takes place close to the end is not quiet the end. its just there to tease you about the end, like what did the predator do? lol

keylight-di

Quote from: The Dude5000 on Dec 16, 2009, 04:38:11 PM
thankyou  ;D although the teaser takes place close to the end is not quiet the end. its just there to tease you about the end, like what did the predator do? lol
Oh not, don't do this! This story imprisoned me like fly in spider's net. This is not fair.
I can supposed what they do. But I wanna be sure. You're an author, not me... ;)
So I'm waiting on next chapters!

The Ghoul

Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 16, 2009, 05:27:55 PM
Quote from: The Dude5000 on Dec 16, 2009, 04:38:11 PM
thankyou  ;D although the teaser takes place close to the end is not quiet the end. its just there to tease you about the end, like what did the predator do? lol
Oh not, don't do this! This story imprisoned me like fly in spider's net. This is not fair.
I can supposed what they do. But I wanna be sure. You're an author, not me... ;)
So I'm waiting on next chapters!
i'm working on chapter 2 right now will make a book thread when its done.  ;D

keylight-di

Great... It's good news. So I'm waiting for the rest of this story. I hope there will be some Preds included? Just suggestion... ;)

The Ghoul

Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 16, 2009, 06:02:52 PM
Great... It's good news. So I'm waiting for the rest of this story. I hope there will be some Preds included? Just suggestion... ;)
it is avp and you'll see them soon.  8)

The Ghoul

The Ghoul

#7
Chapter 2
U.S.S. Pegasus
1540 hrs.

   Reaver heard a knock on the door. He instantly awoke and sprang to the door. He hid behind it for he was naked as he opened the door ajar before the second knock took place. He peeked out his to look and saw the young doctor; Jessica Stanton. Her blonde hair is up and held by sticks of some sort. She had a smile on her face when she saw him acting so cute in her opinion. "Hello Doctor Stanton how may I help you today?" Reaver asked.

"Ah yes could you come with me to med bay its time for your blood drawling again company orders." She said in a heavenly voice of hers.

"Sure just give me a second need to get a bit dress." Reaver laughed lightly and closed the door.

   Reaver looked around the small room for his clothes, they had to be somewhere. He smiled happily when he saw Evac still asleep in bed. He then step right on his clothes that were behind him the whole time. He put on his shirt and pants and was out the door. The kind young doctor was waiting for him. It was odd to see such a tell man and short woman talking together but it didn't mind Reaver at all. "I heard on your promotion Reaver congratulations." She spoke as they walked to med bay in the dull light gray corridor of the ship.

"Thank you but its not really a big deal." Reaver spoke.

"Yes it is now your third in command if anything happens you should be proud of that, I know I would, plus the men trust you and look up to you now for guidance." She spoke happily.

   Reaver thought about her words and thought he should be happy about it. It was after all an honor and some how honor meant a lot to him. They continued to walk in silence enjoying each others presences. Meanwhile Reaver thought about the test the company keeps running on him. He wondered what they were trying to do with his blood? He knew every week they had to draw his blood and they did it with an array of excuses like: "To check for infection." Reaver never been sick once in his life. Maybe he could get something out of Doctor Stanton? They climbed down a ladder to the lower deck and on the left was med bay. He decided he'll ask her when they get ready to draw the blood, it just seemed better to him that way. They walked in. "Have a sit in the patient chair Reaver." The doctor smiled and walked to the counter and started looking for a syringe.

   Reaver took a sit in the patient chair. It was soft and comfortable to make one feel at ease. Reaver looked about the painted white room he figured it was white just so you can see blood easier. He then looked at the floor and saw the burn whole his blood made when the last doctor tried to take his blood but insulted him. He called him nothing but a monster and inhuman. He figured it was a test of his aggression factor when provoked. The man nearly didn't leave the room with his arm and his needle jam up his ass. Reaver still felt bad that he just proved the man right that he could be a monster easily. Reaver then heard Doctor Stanton make a sound of success when she found her syringe. She smiled and put it on a tray with other things then came to Reaver and sat it next to him on a small table. She then took a stripe of latex and tied it onto Reaver's muscular bicep. She then cleaned the inside of his elbow with a sterilizer and then she slid the acid treated needle into the arm. She then slid a test tube into the opening of the syringe and blood began to flow into it. The red crimson glowed like a red glow stick showing that again he wasn't entirely human. She then had Reaver put his hand on the wound to help it clot for she didn't have a bandage that could hold back the acid. "Doctor Stanton. Why does the company need my blood?" Reaver asked.

"To run tests why silly?" She smiled.

"No I know that but what is it for?" Reaver asked.

"For the better of humanity." Jessica spoke it in hallow words.

"I hope so but I think I know what its really for," He played a guess.

"The company want to make another one like me not just test the blood for imperfections." Reaver spoke.

   Jessica then did something Reaver could never get any other doctor to do. She looked at the ground and nodded her head not saying a word. Reaver had a feeling if she spoke it the company will do their way of "policy" on her. "So that's not it?" Reaver played like she said nothing at all and she knew it too. He had a feeling the room was bugged.

"No of course that's not it." She smiled at Reaver for playing that card of taking no for an answer although it was an yes.

"Ok." He smiled at her.  "So am I done here?"

"Yes you are Reaver, have a nice day." She lead him out of med bay.

   Reaver walked out he saw Pat Johnson an redheaded man with freckles and stood at about six-feet two-inches. He had a boyish smile on. "So how are you enjoying your room you big bastard?" Pat joked.

"Is that a way you talk to a superior?" Reaver asked serious like.

"Sorry sir." Pat stood attention.

"Gotcha." Reaver laughed lightly. "Yes I am and what are you up to?"

"Me I'm going to go to planet side soon but I thought you would like to have some food with the rest of us grunts before we left?" Pat grinned.

"Alright you silly hotshot." Reaver joked. "But nothing that requires me to do anything crazy like last time."

"You'll just have to find out." Pat smiled.

   Reaver couldn't help but smile at Pat's comment. He was after all the director of bad ideas but he's also a loyal friend. He knew if there was anything planed for him it was Pat's idea. Reaver knew if her tried anything funny, Reaver can always give him bathroom duty. That made Reaver laugh inside at the thought of it. When Reaver walked into the mess hall all the light were off, that was never a good thing for Reaver. He saw movement in the dark then suddenly the light flashed on blinding him in white light then he heard popping of champagne and heard confetti fly through the air. "Surprise Gunnery Sergeant!" The whole unit yelled.

   Reaver still had a hard time understanding all these celebration for a promotion although he seen it plenty of times due to Brian and his traditions but being this one was different. He figured it had to do with the bad op suffered and people just wanted to cut loose and forget. "You guys shouldn't have." Reaver shook his head and smiled.

"Yes we did and now the fun begins, its time to see the new gunny show his stuff to the rest of the unit."

"Like how?" Reaver was puzzled.

"We're going to see how well you can hold your booze against Big Ray." Pat snickered.

"Isn't that like a violation of some code and disorderly of marines?" Reaver said shaking his head.

"Well that's the fun part plus we're off duty and Master Sarge been a nice guy and said we can celebrate!" Pat snickered.

"I still don't like it." Reaver said.

"Stop being a baby and sit down and enjoy the drink. You got to cut loose sometime." Pat pushed Reaver towards the table.

"Ok but just this one time." Reaver said sitting on the bench of the table. "Why do I get the feeling we're going to get in trouble for doing this on a military ship?" He muttered to himself.

   Reaver then say private Ray Bayfield sat down across from him. He was a large man about six-foot six inches and had muscles to match. He was an African American with a shaved shiny head that reflected the light in white streaks on his bald scalp. He smiled at Reaver "Ok boy I want a good clean drinking contest, no fights just the booze flowing down your throats." Pat said setting his hand down on the table.

"What are we drinking?" Big Ray asked.

"Shots of scotch!" Pat smiled bigly. "A mans drink not like that beer crap plus we know its too light for the both of you." Pat said pulling out a pair of shot glasses and setting them on the table. "First one to pass out loses." Pat smiled as a Evac came in setting the scotch bottles on the table and smiling at Reaver.

"Lets go Gunny!" Big Ray cheered.

   Reaver waited for pat to pour the scotch in the glasses. The liquid was a light brown. Reaver watched the glass closely. Then he heard Pat say go. Reaver and Ray reached for there glasses. They grabbed them at the same time and lifted it to there mouths. They both downed there contents in one big gulp. The liquid tasted like fire and it warmed Reaver's chest and made him twitch his face from the taste. Big Ray laughed. "Another." Reaver said taking the challenge; everyone laugh and Pat poured another round.

   Everyone watched in awe as the two biggest marines they ever seen drink the scotch in gulps. They had about fifteen shots and kept on going. Big Ray looked a little shaky taking all the booze and he started to drift. Reaver started to look lazy eyed and yet they continued. Marines couldn't help but cheer them on. They started to yell "GO GO!" One shot after the other then suddenly Big Ray hiccupped.

"Come on big Gunny is that all ya got." Big Ray head bopped and his voice slurred then he fell head first onto the table after his twentieth shot.

"Hey I won my bet!" Pat cheered. "You see no one can beat Reaver!" Pat chuckled.

"I feel strange and a little light headed." Reaver said getting up with shaking legs.

"That's cause your drunk Reaver!" Pat shouted happily.

"Right." Reaver spun around and fell down. "That was new."

"Ok lets get the drunk gunny up onto his feet." Brian walked in and shouted.

   Everyone stood at attention and Pat dropped a Scotch bottle in surprise. "So you guys did the old get the Gunny drunk contest." Brian said walking down the line then helped Reaver onto his feet.

"We couldn't help it sir!" A private named Jacob shouted.

"You couldn't help it?!" Brian said in a low mean tone. He looked disappointed then he started snickering. "You men remind me of me and my friends. They did the same thing to me." He chuckled.

   Everyone started to laugh. Then Brian cut them off. "Now party now because tomorrow I want you all bright and early for ship maintenances duty for this little shenanigan." Brian chuckled. "Now lets have some fun with the gunny."

   Everyone looked at each other shocked at was this a bad thing or a good thing then they wondered what type of fun? "I want you all to meet me in the shooting range lets see how well the gunny can shoot." Brian left chuckling.

   Reaver couldn't help but think what did he get himself into, now that he was drunk and had to run maintenances in the morning and now he had to shoot drunk. What type of sick joke is this?





Chapter 3
Hunters Blood
0400 hrs


   Raz'da roared at his challenger, his feet spread wide and his arms at his side. It was rare for the elder to receive a challenge from such a young blooded warrior. Yet he took careful steps for he knew Req'ra was no fool; he might be young but he was intelligent. They're pheromones filled the room causes the other hunters in the dueling hall roar in a blood filled rage at the duel. They were excited and eager to watch this fight. Raz'da was old in age but just as nimble as he was in his younger years. He came at Req'ra in belligerent rage that ended with a hateful fist full of predator mandibles. Req'ra tossed his head back taking the full blast of the punch, but he pulled his head back gave a smashing head butt at close range to Raz'da making him stagger back. Req'ra bled glowing green blood from the mouth and mandibles but he chuckled in a blood filled gurgle. Raz'da head spun as he overestimated Req'ra strength entirely; although he was shorter he was defiantly stronger. The crowed roared in loud symphony as they saw the blood. Raz'da and Req'ra circled each other thinking of their move, for the next confrontation. They then heard the raging crowd demand for weapons, they want a grand fight instead of a brawl. Raz'da made slight clicks with his mandibles then spoke with his loud commanding voice. "Bring me a spear and any weapon the challenger chooses!" The amass of hunters roared in cheering triumph.

"My wrist blades!" Req'ra roared and his gauntlet activated sending blades three feet long soaring out of it.

   A hunter tossed Raz'da his spear. It was a mighty weapon it was double edged, had two spear tips both on opposite ends and two short blades each on the two ends. The spear was a head taller then he; it brought warm feelings to him to hold its cold metal. He then looked at his hand that was tattooed with the human sign of Weyland/Yutani. This brought hateful memories to his mind making him angry. He kept it so he could draw on it for strength. He then prayed to the Ancient Ones for strength; then he spun his spear and charged. Req'ra saw the coming storm and grunted as the spear came in with a downward swing. He raised his wrist blades and slashed hitting the spear with the metal and they grinded together sending sparks away from the friction. Raz'da pulled his spear back and parried the coming stab then turn around and stabbed outward making Req'ra took a step back to avoid the hyper sharp spear tip that could pierce the thickest of armor. Raz'da then took a step forward and stabbed again and shoved the spear tip deep into Req'ra shoulder for he tried to side step out of the way. Req'ra roared in anguish as the spear tip severed his shoulder bone to his left arm; making the arm completely useless. Raz'da chuckled and yanked the spear from Req'ra arm making him roar in pain. Req'ra then lost all control and charged, right into Raz'da spear tip, he walked the entire length as it pierced his chest. He grunted and roared and he wanted blood for his shoulder. When he was in range he slashed his wrist blades across Raz'da's face, spraying green bio-luminescent blood on some faithful hunters. Lucky Raz'da didn't lose anything to his face but it still hurt and made him roar in anger. He pulled on his spear bringing Req'ra to his weak knees. He then yanked the spear from Raz'da and then stabbed the tip into his forehead; covering the spear in glowing green chunky gore. Req'ra made a last breath as he died and his eyes slowly glasses over and died. Raz'da pulled the spear free and retracted it and then he lifted his fists in the air and roared deeply that made the wall themselves tremble. The crowed approved and cheered.

   Raz'da then motioned for others to take away the corpse on the ground and eject it into space. Raz'da didn't think it was fit to claim the skull of the dead young one for he didn't prove as dangerous as Raz'da thought he would be; although he did give him a few surprises. Raz'da then heard the hatch door slide open and he recognized the stench of the armored predator that walked through them and the golden armor. He was fully armored and looked ready for a hunt although Raz'da knew he was on the bridge the whole time. "Sluk-Kesh my old friend!" Raz'da spoke happily wiping the blood from his face.
   Sluk-Kesh was Raz'da most loyal and honorable hunter. He was almost as old as Sluk-Kesh short by three years. They grew up together and protected each other on grand hunts of old. If there was anyone he could trust it was Sluk-Kesh. He kneeled to his elder in respect. "I come with news for our clan old one. We found the facility you were held at and the honor prey queen is still there." He spoke faithfully like a loyal minion.

   The memories flashed past Raz'da's eyes of the humans running the horrid tests on him. Taking his blood and using it to make things live longer then the creation of a dangerous life form in the human's own image. It filled him with angry, he hated the human's that tested him and tortured him except the one female that aided him in his escape. She taught him a lot even their tongue. The prey on that world would make for a good hunt, he only escaped when they took him off planet. He couldn't escape the facility even with his help. It brought him pleasure thinking of the slaughter he can do at that facility. "Sluk-Kesh I have a very important mission for you." Raz'da walked out of the dueling hall and into the long corridors of the ship.

   Sluk-Kesh followed and asked. "What would you have me do?"

"Simple go to planet in our fastest hunting ship and free the honor prey in the facility for a grand hunt. We'll slaughter the humans and the honor prey. Then we will wait for them send in their marines. They'll prove a fight for our hunters and then simple we will leave after it is done. This will be a good hunt and we'll raise the facility to the ground." Raz'da pumped his fist.

"I will do what you say old one." Sluk-Kesh bowed and left his friends side and went to the airlock.

   Raz'da walked the dark corridors of the ship towards the bridge. He knew Sluk-Kesh will be successful for he always was and Raz'da wanted to get a hunting party to the facility as soon as possible. Soon he'll take his revenge and if the new human wasn't on the facility he knew they'll send him after the human's lost communication with the facility. He had it all figured out in his mind, and then he clicked his mandibles and sung a old war song he was taught.
   Sluk-Kesh was always ready for a hunt, always armed , always fully geared. He walked the corridors of the ship towards the ship airlock for the hunting vessels. He'll take scout ship out; a one hunter craft that was very fast and agile used to scout out areas for future hunts. He was glad he was assigned this mission for he was bored and his trophy wall grew with old trophies, he needed some new ones. He couldn't help but feel happy. The only thing brought him any happiness was the hunt or mating with a female. The hunt was grand in his eyes; two grand prey to hunt. He longed for another honor prey skull on his wall.

   Sluk-Kesh walked into the airlock and climbed into the cockpit of the small tubular ship. He sat in the control chair and started pushing and running his finger along the consoles to tell the mother ship that he's ready to be freed. He then felt the ship drop from the mother ship and he chuckled. It is time for the hunt. He activated the engines and set in course for the human planet.

keylight-di

God bless you.  ;D
You are faster writer than I'm reader.
Description of the duel is breathtaking. Only one thing: the name Sluk-Kesh reminds me one book, you know what I mean?

The names of the characters can not also be too similar (Raz'da/Req'ra). This confuses the reader. If you need some ideas - I have a few. ;)

But apart from that - great. I love this story.  ;D

Go on!

The Ghoul

The Ghoul

#9
Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 17, 2009, 07:23:39 AM
God bless you.  ;D
You are faster writer than I'm reader.
Description of the duel is breathtaking. Only one thing: the name Sluk-Kesh reminds me one book, you know what I mean?

The names of the characters can not also be too similar (Raz'da/Req'ra). This confuses the reader. If you need some ideas - I have a few. ;)

But apart from that - great. I love this story.  ;D

Go on!
I have changed the names to Sluk-kesh is now Suk-Kresh, Req'ra is now Tek'ra and Raz'da is the same.

I would love to have a list of predator names to draw on as i write this because other predators are bound to show up.  ;D (have to make the hunting party)

keylight-di


OK. Here you go: some of my ideas.
Grar-tha'de,
Ra-hak'khan
K'tch'ti'lha
Gan'thu'hvn (my favorite ;))
Tzu'k'tey
Bak-hoi'nle
Sarek's'kah
Sae'ki'de
If name is ending by -de, it's always males name. Females have -di.
More or less.  ;)
I can go on for very long time, in many ways... ;) If you need more, just let me know.
Hunting party? Oh, yea...  ;D

The Ghoul

Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 17, 2009, 08:58:05 AM

OK. Here you go: some of my ideas.
Grar-tha'de,
Ra-hak'khan
K'tch'ti'lha
Gan'thu'hvn (my favorite ;))
Tzu'k'tey
Bak-hoi'nle
Sarek's'kah
Sae'ki'de
If name is ending by -de, it's always males name. Females have -di.
More or less.  ;)
I can go on for very long time, in many ways... ;) If you need more, just let me know.
Hunting party? Oh, yea...  ;D
thank you you've been helpful very on that part, those some pretty awsome names  ;D

The Ghoul

Chapter 4
Orion Facility
0600 hrs.

   Sara Valentine awoke up in suddenly surprise and shock as her alarm clock rang with an annoying klaxon. She looked around franticly like if they were under attack by a hostile company take over. Then she realized it was her alarm clock which has been stuck on the annoying red alert alarm setting. She felt really stupid for falling for the clock's evil trick again. She slammed her fist on the top of it to make it stop. The clock stopped with a pleasing beep. She got up and stretched and happily walked to the shower. She quickly looked in the mirror and found her self pleased to look at a beautiful woman. Nice soft white skin, blue eyes, long blonde hair, nice cut cheek bones, and a mouth of pearly straight white teeth with a set of full lips. She kissed the mirror and turned on the shower pleased with herself. She quickly unhooked her black bra and removed her black thong and climbed into the steaming warm water.

   Sara always like the mornings she would feel good about the day. The only time during the day before work started. It's manageable now but several years ago they tested on alien life form and stole its very blood for Company's sick uses. She didn't let those thoughts and memory's flow into her mind not now. She focused on the sweet smelling air caused by the shampoo. Sara rinsed her long hair free of the lavender shampoo. She smiled from the warmth of water and exhaled. She then took a bar of purple looking soap and rubbed it against her soft skinned chest. She treaded carefully over the breasts for they were sensitive. After she covered her chest with soap she rinsed it off and smelled clean with a strong mix of lavenders. She quickly walked out of the shower and into the open of the bath room. She always admired the dark blue tile of the bathroom after a good shower, it made her feel home. She grabbed a pink towel hanging on the shower wall. She quickly dried off by rubbing the towel fast on her skin. She then walked to counter and mirror and grabbed her hair dryer. She turned it on and cleaned the mirror then started drying her hair. After she was done she had to grab her pills so show opened the mirror cabinet.

   She grabbed her pills that were in a brown transparent bottle. She smiled and closed the mirror cabinet. Then she jumped for she something in the mirror. It was a blood hungry drooling Xenomorph drone and it was right behind hair. She slowly turned around to face it and there was nothing there. She exhaled deeply in sheer relief. She quickly popped open her Seroquel bottle and swallowed two pills that put in her hand. She had a slight disorder a mental-illness, schizoaffective disorder. She lost her mood stabilizer and she couldn't get a new one until the end of the month. She took a deep breath and tried to restart her happy morning but that hallucination absolutely destroyed it. She felt depressed, instead of hyper now. She walked out of the bathroom and got dressed in a shallow mood. Then the thought of hot warm chocolate popped into her mind and made her cheer up. She wanted some hot chocolate now and it was snowing perfect timing.

   She quickly walked out of her room with a blouse, blue jeans, and a white lab coat. The corridors of the facility were lit with a bright white lights so you can see everything. She walked south her high heels click against the smooth glossed dark metal floor. The mess hall was always close to the dormitories for those hungry midnight snackers. She entered the mess hall and could already smell the lovely food that Jack Wilson cooked for breakfast. "That smell oh so good Jack!" She yelled.

"Morning Sara! I'll make you a plate real fast." Jack smiled and gave a hearty laugh. He was a tall, big man that looked like a shaved Santa Clause. He had a tattoo with a heart that said mom across it. Sara laughs every time she see's it for he calls her mom at times because she saves his butt a lot.

   Sara ran to the counter and waited for her tray. "Is it good today Jack?" She chirped.

"Is it good?" Jack asked. "What type of insulting question is that, you know I'm the best chief on the planet." Jack turned around and smiled at her happily. He then brought her tray. "Hot Chocolate?" Jack asked.

"Yes please." Sara grinned widely and grabbed her tray of food. "How much I owe you?" She asked when Jack give her hot chocolate.

"It's on the house for last night." He smiled and Sara thanked him and left.

   Sara found a table and sat down by herself. Some of her friends are working and the others are still sleeping for it's not there shift. She took in a deep inhale of the food. It smelled heavenly. The bacon cooked perfect, the eggs scrambled and fluffy and the sausage looked delicious. She took her fork and stuck a sausage and lifted into her mouth. She bit down and it was hot. The Sausage made her breath with it still in her mouth to cool it off but it tasted magnificent. She finally managed to swallow it with a gulp. She could feel the sausage warming her belly. She loved Jack's cooking. She then dug into the eggs and ate them, they were warm and prefect like yellow fluffy pieces of heaven in every bite. She then bit down on the crunchy bacon, every crush brought satisfaction to her every bite. She quickly finished her meal then began drinking the hot chocolate which was cool enough to drink now. The warm thick liquid warmed her throat as it slid down to her urinary track below. It tasted perfect to her and is was just what she needed to start her day off right. She finished and took a deep breath to let the refreshing cool air in to cool her throat. She then pickup her tray and walked to the trash and disposed of her trash and set the tray on top of the trashcan.

   Sara then quickly left the mess hall feeling ready to start the day of her work. She needed to report the science and analyze the blood of patient 1146 William Reaver. She liked Reaver from what she read in his file he's an honest man and yet his not human. She also knew his blood is very important for it interacted with lots of things even the Xenomorphs on some level although with the queen nothing has appeared ever since he departed to USCMC. She found an elevator and entered it. She pushed the down button to the bottom of the sub-levels where the Xenomorphs stayed and have test ran on them.

   Sara whistled a tune to herself as the elevator descended into the lower depths of the facility. She felt the walls of the cramped elevator they were cool to the touch. Then she felt a sudden stop. "Warning Xenomorph Out Break on sub level four B." The computer spoke loudly through the speakers of the elevator.

   Then suddenly the doors opened and it turned out she was on that level. The level was quiet too quiet. She walked out slowly and then the elevator doors closed behind her. It then started to move back up, she's have to make to the stairs of the lower level to get to safety. The Xenomorph would be going up not down. She reached the end of a T intersection and she looked down one hall and then the other. Unknowingly something climbed from vent above her and onto the floor. It drooled and had no eyes with a elongated skull. Its head tipped from side to side as it flickered its lips taking in its preys height and body. Sara slowly turned around when she felt something breath on the back of her neck. When she saw it her jaw dropped and she knew this one was very real. It rocked its head like to hypnotize its prey as it opened its jaw slowly to show an inner jaw filled with teeth. Sara couldn't move her legs. She tried to will her legs to move but she couldn't look away at the monster that stood before her.  Then the elevator came back and open and security screamed "Get Down!"

   She dove to the side as the inner jaw shot out catching a piece of her blonde hair. She landed hard on her belly and heard shooting of pulse rifles. Then the alien gave a bone chilling scream as its body shake from bullet impacts. It was like a gun downing by the mafia the alien screamed and screamed being filled with hot lead. Then the firing stopped and the alien danced on its legs then fell forward dead. Its acid blood seeped into the floor and started melting it. Sara was scared but at least the monster was dead, now she can hopefully get to work without any other close to death situations.

   She got up and told the guards she was ok and re-entered the elevator and took it down to another level. She existed it and walked down a corridor towards her office on the left. She entered the door and sat at her desk and tried to calm herself of what just happened. She suddenly felt tired her med's must be kicking in. She shook her head clear and figured work will clear up her mind. She pulled up the file on the test results of latest blood test. She started to read it and already felt herself calming down. Then she hit something she needed to report to her supervisor. She gone to glass cupboard and retrieved the blood sample and file. She knew it was Reaver's because it was glowing red. She then left her office and walked the long corridor again; her heels making firm clicks on the floor. She found Dr. Steinberg's office and walked in. "Sir I got something to report to you." Sara spoke.

"Yes what is?" Admiring the view of the queen he had by staring out his window.

   Sara looked at the queen. It had its head low being perched on its sac. Its head hid in its hood that which looked like a massive crown. The Queens arms were locked together and shackled. Sara then looked at the sac, although her highness slept it still laid eggs behind her. Sara finally snapped out of the nightmare she looked at. "Sir Reaver's blood acidity's count is getting higher drastically. I think the Xenomorph part of him is pushing for domaninces sir."

"How do other Xenomorphs react to the blood?"

"They act strange the test shows them in either a blood raged spree or a every lasting calmness." As she brought the blood in front of the window to give to Stienberg the alien queen awoke and started to hiss and scream loudly. The blood in the test tube started to glow brightly and seemed to be reacting to the queen. Sara and Stienberg suddenly grabbed there heads, as the queen screamed. They began to hear a voice in their heads. My son, where is my son?! The voice was firm and yet held love of a mother in its tone. Sara fell to her knees overwhelmed by emotions that she was feeling. Angry, hate, regret, love, happyness all of it bombard her at once then she feel into a deep sleep on the floor and was haunted by nightmares.

   Unknowingly to Sara everyone that was asleep in the facility suffered horrid nightmares and screamed in there sleep adding to the loud power of the Queen's scream!

   

keylight-di

So, well... You're really fast...  ;D
I find this story very sensual, in all senses of this word.  Fascinatingly sensual.

I always imagined Xeno's sensory perception as something close to synaesthesia. Synaesthesia is the key word in this case. Check it in the wikipedia. (I've got synaesthesia). Think about it. This is only suggestion.

One thing - I don't speak English very well, so I could be wrong. But I think there are a little lack... how to say ... points. Punctuation. This makes the text difficult to translate. But maybe I'm wrong, I can't be sure.  :-\

This story becomes more and more intriguing .... ;D

The Ghoul

Quote from: keylight-di on Dec 17, 2009, 02:46:07 PM
So, well... You're really fast...  ;D
I find this story very sensual, in all senses of this word.  Fascinatingly sensual.

I always imagined Xeno's sensory perception as something close to synaesthesia. Synaesthesia is the key word in this case. Check it in the wikipedia. (I've got synaesthesia). Think about it. This is only suggestion.

One thing - I don't speak English very well, so I could be wrong. But I think there are a little lack... how to say ... points. Punctuation. This makes the text difficult to translate. But maybe I'm wrong, I can't be sure.  :-\

This story becomes more and more intriguing .... ;D

i'm editing the story so its easier to read and runs smoother for everyone and thank your for the help :)

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