Quote from: SM on Mar 19, 2018, 10:24:00 PM
Quote from: ChrisPachi on Mar 19, 2018, 11:35:54 AM
QuoteA long, snaking, tendril-like CABLE extends from the SHIP, reaching out, tethering to DAVID'S BROKEN BODY, ATTACHING.
Hello!
QuoteHe gently reaches out .. She doesn't flinch. He touches her cheek. She looks at him.
SHAW
Are you going to kill me now?
DAVID
Why would I do that, Elizabeth?
He smiles, his face utterly readable.
Oh FFS, who hires these people?
Because, of course, every word of a script draft has to be profound poetry.
To be fair this was a very very rough draft, just hitting off story beats. Still, I wish some of the imagery was in here. Dead Engineers in their Suits surrounding the Derelict in the hundreds is far more foreboding, right before it all goes to shit. Kareen being a victim of the spores as well as Ledward. And especially at the end, one of the beasts trying desperately to rip your space/ice suit open, and shooting its tongue at your visor multiple times. But not getting through after twice. I know in most movies it would have shot right through, but the idea you're pinned to the ground by this thing, and it's shooting its jaws right into your face, cracking the visor harder each time, that's a f**king terrifying image. Reminds me of the first Jurassic Park, when the Tyrannosaurus blast through the sunroof.
There's a lot of imagery in here I think should have stayed, while the rest of the script remained mostly the same.
Another scene needed (that weren't in either script I read) I think, is Orrem and David bickering about God in the temple. Something along the lines of
Orrem: "These things, the city, they look just like us. What is going on, how can this be possible"
David: "They are your Gods"
Orrem: "That's not possible, God created man in his own image"
David: "So did they."